We call working theses “working” because they change as we dwell deeper into the argument. In this assignment, you will revise your working thesis for Essay 3 based on feedback you received from your classmates.
Step 1: Review
Step 2: Revise
The key to writing is revision. No writer, no matter how good, can come up with brilliant arguments on the first thought. We revise based on feedback from others (like in your discussion) and as we get more information (like from your little bit of research so far).
Let’s see if we can make your thesis from earlier this week even stronger. Think about the following and the revise/rewrite your thesis:
- Can your thesis be more concise/clear
- Are you using the best word choices
- Is the thesis narrow enough to cover a 6-8 page paper
- Is it grammatically correct
To remind yourself about what a thesis should look like, you can review some of the information below.
If you need a reminder about thesis statements, please review the information below:
What is a Thesis Statement?
A thesis statement is a sentence that states the topic and purpose of your paper. A good thesis statement will direct the structure of your essay and will allow your reader to understand the ideas you will discuss within your paper.
Where does a Thesis Statement go?
Your thesis should be stated somewhere in the opening paragraphs of your paper, most often as the last sentence of the introduction. Often, a thesis will be one sentence, but for complex subjects, you may find it more effective to break the thesis statement into two sentences.
- Your thesis statement should be one to two sentences.
- Your thesis statement should clearly present the main idea of your essay and make some kind of assertion. The thesis should be a debatable claim.
- Your thesis should not make an “announcement” about what your essay will cover. Instead, it should just present your assertion.
- For example, a thesis like this makes an announcement: In this paper, I will persuade you to vote for candidates who support education reform.
- Instead you might write: Because our education system is in need of reform to better serve students of color, we should vote for candidates who are willing to make the necessary changes.